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10,000 times better.
but I'd write, "Paint the trim next to the bath tub or it'll swell up bigger than a space walker with a leaky suit"
Then I'd sit back and wait for the phone call.
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Right. If I start with the command to fix it, then tack on the why, the descriptive part is less cumbersome.
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If I'm trying to describe a problem, I try to always start the sentence with a preposition and describe the location first: beside the tub, under the sink, in the furnace, over the rainbow, etc. When you're trying to describe an issue, particularly a complex one, it helps to cite the location first so that people can imagine it from the ground up, so to speak, as it's being described.
If I'm writing a recommendation, I try to always start the sentence with a verb: paint the trim, patch the hole, hire an electrician, etc. This puts the sentence into the imperative making it very easy to understand.
If I'm combining the two, I start with the verb, as you did in your second example, because it makes the sentence more lively and active. To do it the other way just doesn't have the same punch: to minimize water damage, paint the MDF, is blah.
By the way, several years ago, another inspector challenged me to write a whole report in iambic pentameter. (Beside the tub, I found a rotted floor. Repair it now, before your foot goes through.) I didn't get very far with it, but it made me think about report writing in ways that I hadn't considered before. It gave me fresh perspectives and it was a challenging mental exercise. Try a few lines in Haiku or IP or some other poetic form to stretch your report writing muscles.
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[#6] Posted: 04/18/2012 - 6:35:19 PM | | |
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I'd have a picture, an arrow pointing @ the conditions, and say "the bathroom baseboard needs paint here".
If someone doesn't paint it, they'd learn why they should've.
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If I'm trying to describe a problem, I try to always start the sentence with a preposition and describe the location first: beside the tub, under the sink, in the furnace, over the rainbow, etc. When you're trying to describe an issue, particularly a complex one, it helps to cite the location first so that people can imagine it from the ground up, so to speak, as it's being described.
If I'm writing a recommendation, I try to always start the sentence with a verb: paint the trim, patch the hole, hire an electrician, etc. This puts the sentence into the imperative making it very easy to understand.
If I'm combining the two, I start with the verb, as you did in your second example, because it makes the sentence more lively and active. To do it the other way just doesn't have the same punch: to minimize water damage, paint the MDF, is blah.
By the way, several years ago, another inspector challenged me to write a whole report in iambic pentameter. (Beside the tub, I found a rotted floor. Repair it now, before your foot goes through.) I didn't get very far with it, but it made me think about report writing in ways that I hadn't considered before. It gave me fresh perspectives and it was a challenging mental exercise. Try a few lines in Haiku or IP or some other poetic form to stretch your report writing muscles.
Curious. Did you gain this mastery of prose without benefit of a major in English?
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Quote: Originally posted by MarcQuote: Originally posted by Jim Katen
If I'm trying to describe a problem, I try to always start the sentence with a preposition and describe the location first: beside the tub, under the sink, in the furnace, over the rainbow, etc. When you're trying to describe an issue, particularly a complex one, it helps to cite the location first so that people can imagine it from the ground up, so to speak, as it's being described.
If I'm writing a recommendation, I try to always start the sentence with a verb: paint the trim, patch the hole, hire an electrician, etc. This puts the sentence into the imperative making it very easy to understand.
If I'm combining the two, I start with the verb, as you did in your second example, because it makes the sentence more lively and active. To do it the other way just doesn't have the same punch: to minimize water damage, paint the MDF, is blah.
By the way, several years ago, another inspector challenged me to write a whole report in iambic pentameter. (Beside the tub, I found a rotted floor. Repair it now, before your foot goes through.) I didn't get very far with it, but it made me think about report writing in ways that I hadn't considered before. It gave me fresh perspectives and it was a challenging mental exercise. Try a few lines in Haiku or IP or some other poetic form to stretch your report writing muscles. Curious. Did you gain this mastery of prose without benefit of a major in English?
It's not a mastery of prose, just a formula that works for me. Whatever writing ability I have came from reading Strunk & White (having it beat into me in both high school & college, actually) and from paying attention to whatever Walter Jowers said when he talked about writing.
I attended a "progressive" school that didn't use grade scores (just pass/fail) and had very few tests. In lieu of tests, we had to write, and write, and write. That probably helped too.
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Jim should write stories. His talent is wasted perfecting home inspection reports.
He has stories he should tell.
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As others have said, describing the location first if very helpfull. Here's how I would have described it.
Main bath: Baseboard trim need paint at bare end.
Main bath: Baseboard trim need paint at bare end, to prevent water damage.
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